It's just a basic outline of my story idea i have much more to write about i was just showing it to see if it had any worth to it. I will be remaking it and explaining everything along with fixing any errors i have in it. I made this in about 45 min. It's just the bare bones of my story not even that really. Thanks for the criticism.
edit:Also thank you ZarroTsu and Shaddowval
This post has been edited by Iperks: Nov 4 2012, 01:58 PM