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[ashtoban]

I need some advice for a project I'm working on. My friend told me it need some help, so here we go...
My main character Lucy is an normal girl and she is friends with a Rabbit/Human named Shelia. They live in a small town and they decided to go explore in the woods because they hear of a world fliied with faires. Here they meet a runaway named Selena. Selena says she ran away with her friend Dalsa. They both are being hunted by their own kind for reasons unknown. The hunters are Saku and Vas . Lucy agrees to hide them in her family estate, but the night after Lucy started having strange dreams... In Lucy's dream, she meets four strange girls Aqua, Ember, Ivy, and Zephyr. Then a fifth woman appeared then asked Lucy, Does these girls look like you and then disappeared. The second night after, Lucy saw the woman again, this time she proposed something. She asked "Lucy. I know you are hiding those 2 tratiors, and I can make you burn were you sleep, but there's a deal I need to make with you..." Those two girls need to be punished and I need the punisher." I could easily do it myself, but I need some entertainment

[Show/Hide] Real Reason why the Mysterious Woman want's Selena, and Dalsa dead.

Dalsa and Selena are the mysterious woman's daughters and she dosen't want to carry the shame of a traitor's parent.

. I need you to kill those vile scum, Lucy. Lucy said" why should I do your dirty work!" The woman said to Lucy "You know they won't kill those two, they'll just throw them in prison, but I need you to get rid of them so they won't have any chance to escape again." Lucy" the woman said again. Lucy I can make your innate power become a reality." Lucy stated she wouldn't take a cliche deal like that, So the Woman showed Lucy her true form as an Higher, but Lucy didn't want any of that stuff, she just wanted to be normal. This angered the Woman, so she took Lucy and split her soul in four. (Those four girls from before represent Lucy's inner feelings.) More coming later when I think about it...

This post has been edited by ashtoban: Oct 4 2012, 04:17 PM

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