| X-M-O writes something. |
Jul 30 2012, 03:34 PM
RM Skill: Undisclosed
All right, so I normally do not ever submit my own written works anywhere online (past results have ended in theft), however this will be a topic where I will submit a couple of things that I'm interested in receiving feedback on (nothing I will be publishing, these are strictly personal works and are copyright to me). =]
For now I'm only going to submit a poem to see if I can get the kind of feedback I'm looking for; if I get enough, I'll start posting up some pieces of a story that I've been wanting to finish writing, but haven't had the motivation to complete (it will be a short story, unless feedback here pushes me to write more, lol).
Here's what I have for now, an old poem I wrote back in High School. ^^
The Blind Child
I was born blind,
I see no colour.
I am sidelined,
I have no mother.
I have been marred,
And you will agree,
It would be hard
To live like me.
In the darkness
I still see light,
In the vision-less
I still see right.
What I envision
Is not fine arts.
It is precision
Posts in this topic
thatbennyguy Really good, X-M-O. I like your economy of words, ... Jul 30 2012, 05:46 PM MagitekElite That is really good, X-M-O!
I very much like ... Jul 30 2012, 06:13 PM X-M-O QUOTE (thatbennyguy @ Jul 30 2012, 08:46 ... Jul 30 2012, 07:01 PM amerk QUOTE (X-M-O @ Jul 30 2012, 10... Jul 31 2012, 09:26 AM Lato I liked it, nice and simple/ to the point. Theft i... Jul 30 2012, 07:36 PM X-M-O It has stopped me, lol.
However, there are some th... Jul 30 2012, 08:00 PM MagitekElite Ugh, thieves! What in the world possess them t... Jul 30 2012, 08:15 PM X-M-O Thank you, I'm glad you like it that much. ^^
... Jul 30 2012, 08:37 PM X-M-O I'm actually not at all opposed to the way the... Jul 31 2012, 01:35 PM RionTarokai Well I normally don't like poetry all that muc... Aug 1 2012, 09:37 AM X-M-O I understand what you mean. If poetry doesn't ... Aug 1 2012, 01:12 PM X-M-O And now, what I have so far in my story:
[Show/... Aug 2 2012, 01:14 AM RionTarokai I would probably feel the exact same as Ian in the... Aug 2 2012, 02:39 PM thatbennyguy That's really good, X-M-O. I like your style o... Aug 2 2012, 03:13 PM X-M-O QUOTE (RionTarokai @ Aug 2 2012, 05:39 PM... Aug 2 2012, 05:02 PM DementedCashew That poem touched my heart, and it reminds of me o... Aug 10 2012, 03:38 PM X-M-O Thank you, I really appreciate the comment.
Helen... Aug 10 2012, 06:39 PM DementedCashew Your welcome! And as nice as I may seem, comp... Aug 10 2012, 08:10 PM X-M-O What an analogy! XD
Annoying Orange meets Deme... Aug 10 2012, 09:00 PM DementedCashew Lol, Annoying Orange is actually quite annoying. ... Aug 10 2012, 10:05 PM
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