Haemophages and other cutscenes..., (Need a feedback!!!) Options

[Jens of Zanicuud]

Hi everyone,

I'll treat this topic as a sort of "garbage collector" in which I'll post some of my game's cutscenes / pictures in order to get some feedback.
At the moment I need some feedback about this.

You are free to give feedback about the old pictures, but I'd like to know something about the newer one

Thanks in advance

old overtoure
I'm working at Tryadine Effect Project by November 2011, but never really designed how Haemophages (i.e. monsters which appears in the game) could look like.
A couple of days ago, I was hitten by an idea and drawn this creature.
1.

[Show/Hide] Haemophage

Then, I wasn't satisfied and slightly edited it.
2.

[Show/Hide] Haemophage (reissue)

What do you think of the picture? What was the best one between the two?
I'd really appreciate to receive some comment...

I had some problem too with Day 3 ending cutscene.
In your opinion, what's the best picture between those three:

1.

[Show/Hide] Drawn with Paint.NET, coloured with Paint.NET

2.

[Show/Hide] Drawn by hand, coloured with Paint.NET

3.

[Show/Hide] Edited Cutscene

Thanks in advance,

Jens

This post has been edited by Jens of Zanicuud: Nov 19 2012, 09:15 AM

[bacon]

When you color make sure you use a different hue for highlights and shadows. Dont just make the same color darker or use the burn/dodge (not saying you did!).
As for the bodies, you might want to brush up on your anatomy. Right now it doesn't look like you are drawing a basic skeleton to guide where everything goes. Drawing guidelines is important because it helps keep your people consistent.

The first one is better than the 2nd one because the body is more normal than the other one. The whole body in the 2nd one is pretty wonky. First off, those boobs are way to huge. Like on a frame like her, those boobs would prop cause back pain because of the weight. x: If she is wearing armor you prob shouldn't ever see her boobs. The shoulders area a bit broad and stiff. Loosen them by letting the shoulders go down more. The neck is too broad as well and it makes it look more like a dude (because men tend to have broader necks). Also the face looks a bit masculine but that might be because of the neck and the placement of the features. Try shrinking your head a little but and soften the features maybe~
Just remember there are tons more different between male bodies and female bodies other than boobs~
Anyways good luck on your art endeavors would love to see more~

[Jens of Zanicuud]

When you color make sure you use a different hue for highlights and shadows. Dont just make the same color darker or use the burn/dodge (not saying you did!).
As for the bodies, you might want to brush up on your anatomy. Right now it doesn't look like you are drawing a basic skeleton to guide where everything goes. Drawing guidelines is important because it helps keep your people consistent.

The first one is better than the 2nd one because the body is more normal than the other one. The whole body in the 2nd one is pretty wonky. First off, those boobs are way to huge. Like on a frame like her, those boobs would prop cause back pain because of the weight. x: If she is wearing armor you prob shouldn't ever see her boobs. The shoulders area a bit broad and stiff. Loosen them by letting the shoulders go down more. The neck is too broad as well and it makes it look more like a dude (because men tend to have broader necks). Also the face looks a bit masculine but that might be because of the neck and the placement of the features. Try shrinking your head a little but and soften the features maybe~
Just remember there are tons more different between male bodies and female bodies other than boobs~
Anyways good luck on your art endeavors would love to see more~

And as regards 3rd edit? I've shrinked the head and resized the breast (as I said before, I didn't intend to oversize it. That is, I'm only a beginner and made a stupid error in proportions).

I'd also need comment&hints about that Noctiphage picture I posted in the previous reply...

Thanks in advance,

Jens