Creating an opening sequence, Feedback wanted. Options

[steve09424]

Hello,

Currently working on a new project and I've just threw up an opening scene that the players see once the game begins.
Any feedback and criticisms welcome!

[steve09424]

Thanks for your comments! The software I used to capture it was Microsoft Expression.

I did deliberate for a good few minutes if it was 'is' or 'are' when I typed it, turns out that it can be either in my accent >_> Good job you spotted beginning!

One problem I do have with creating games is creating dialogue and text that, while informative and interesting, doesn't give away too much information to begin with. I still need to find that right balance that I would be happy with, as a developer and a player.