Ultimatum *Beta, Finally a Beta Options

[SOLIDSTRIFER]

Ultimatum: The Wrath of The Gods

[i]Abstract- *A hero's legacy fights on for the future of the world.

Genre- *Fantasy, Drama

Platform- *Rpg Maker vx

Beta Download
http://www.megaupload.com/?d=S80KJOC7

Story
45 years have passed since a bloody civil war had Brought the World of Aithen onto the brink of destruction. The victors of that war were left to rule in peace thanks to the help from the Sword of Ultimatum. But the very evil that sought to destroy the world all those years ago was none other than the Gods themselves. Now that the great Hero Leon has aged and can no longer stand up to this evil , his son and some very determined warriors must stand up and face the real culprits, the gods of Aithen.

Characters:

Leon Colton
Age: 65 sex:Male Personality:Heroic
The hero of legend, He defeated the great evil once before but because of the stains of time he can no longer find that inner strength he once had.

Tex Colton
Age: 17 Sex:Male Personality: Heroic
The son of Leon, wants to prove to his father that he is the rightful heir to his father's legacy. Has spent his entire life on a secluded island because of his father's fear of the world.

The heroes of Seifen
Age: Varies Sex: Varies Personalities: varies
The guardians of the world. Commanded by Leon.

Seifen
Age:??? Sex:Male Personality:God-like, Caring
The Creator of Aithen, once a loving god, gave all his power to a sword.

The Gods
Age:??? Sex: Varies Personality: Powerhungry, Vengeful
Used Akimatos to dispose of Seifen and now plan on destroying the planet. Hate the way humans live their lives and wish to dispose of them

Akimaltos
Age:Deceased Sex: Male Personality: Powerhungry, Depressed
: A once evil king who began the civil war. Now a fallen Spirit who has returned to reveal a secret that could change their lives for ever.

Jack:
Age: Sex:Male Personality: Vengeful

Son of another legendary warrior known as Slashvier, Lost his father in a battle against a god, wants revenge for his father's loss.

Maria:
Age:19 Sex:Female Personality: Prissy
An old friend of Jack's. She only took upon this mission to stay close to Jack.

Christine
Age:23 Sex:Female Personality:Snobby
A trained mage sent by the Warriors of Seifen to assist the party in their mission.

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Credits:


Story: Solidstrifer

Maps: some revised by markchapman and Lukas, The rest By SolidStrifer

Events: Solidstrifer

Music: Nobuo Uematsu,Elix

Director: Solidstrifer

Scripts : Rmakervx.
Features
Well I am trying to implement an atb battle system into the game, I have a location display, Amped up battle hud, custom main menu

This post has been edited by SOLIDSTRIFER: Dec 23 2011, 10:54 PM

[ambalance]

Hey buddy,
I'm not one to lecture about a topic not meeting the criteria, but you should probably try to include more information about your game if you want people to test it out.
At first glance here there is no information about the storyline, nothing to show what we can expect from your demo.
Even if you only want someone to try out your game you should try to 'sell' it to the public.
If someone were to test it out, they would definately want to see more information on what the storyline is about, the characters, the features of your game, maybe?
A couple of pretty pictures too? And a title would be even better.

[literarygoth]

Played for a bit and have some suggestions to make:

In the intro, check your text screens, twice they change the background from black/clear to blue and move down on the screen.
Also, the sentences in these text boxes were broken in an odd way.
What I mean is this:

You'd have description
of your
background story lined up like this.

It made it awkward to read. Would it be possible to do a cut scene to partially describe the history? In my opinion it would be more interesting to see it unfold rather than just read it all. Then, once you get to the screen where you meet the kids' dad and he takes off then you meet the other two characters and they break the 4th wall - I really didn't like that at all. You're just getting into the story that you've created, and then you tear the player out by throwing in creator cameo's. Frankly I found it really annoying.

Next, your mapping really needs help. You're using them wrong. Some aren't ground tiles, but you've used them as ground tiles. You have overworld tiles on your inner city maps and the maps for inside houses are not only mapped incorrectly, but extremely confusing because you're not using the wall tiles properly.
There should be some mapping tutorials on this site somewhere, but I'll give you some examples of what I mean.



The autotiles circled in red, are the outsides of buildings.
You really need to pay attention to how high buildings are, if they're the same height as your player - it's going to make the building look like a kids playhouse. It simply won't 'look' big enough for the player to walk into, nevermind stand in. I suggest doing something like this:



Now you might be wondering what that black space is. That's to show that there's an actual space, opening, in the wall once the player has opened the door. Otherwise, it gives the impression that they're opening a door and then walking into the wall xD
You can put your door events over this without a problem and it will look great in game.

Next - inside buildings.

These tiles are for inner walls/inside buildings etc.


Again, you really need to pay attention to how high the walls are. If the walls are only one square high, it looks impossible for people to live inside. Making walls at least two squares high looks more realistic, and you can play around with depth, like in the picture. Notice the walls are all 3 squares high except once you go up the stairs into that kitchen area, the walls are only 2 squares high.

Also, pay attention to, and make use of the shadow tile. This will REALLY add depth to your cities and towns and inside of houses etc.
Here's an example of a town from one of my projects:

[Show/Hide] Town

I think you show promise, but definately playtest your project often so you catch minor mistakes. I do believe I caught a couple spelling and grammar misshaps in the introduction of the game.

[SOLIDSTRIFER]

Played for a bit and have some suggestions to make:

In the intro, check your text screens, twice they change the background from black/clear to blue and move down on the screen.
Also, the sentences in these text boxes were broken in an odd way.
What I mean is this:

You'd have description
of your
background story lined up like this.

It made it awkward to read. Would it be possible to do a cut scene to partially describe the history? In my opinion it would be more interesting to see it unfold rather than just read it all. Then, once you get to the screen where you meet the kids' dad and he takes off then you meet the other two characters and they break the 4th wall - I really didn't like that at all. You're just getting into the story that you've created, and then you tear the player out by throwing in creator cameo's. Frankly I found it really annoying.

Next, your mapping really needs help. You're using them wrong. Some aren't ground tiles, but you've used them as ground tiles. You have overworld tiles on your inner city maps and the maps for inside houses are not only mapped incorrectly, but extremely confusing because you're not using the wall tiles properly.
There should be some mapping tutorials on this site somewhere, but I'll give you some examples of what I mean.



The autotiles circled in red, are the outsides of buildings.
You really need to pay attention to how high buildings are, if they're the same height as your player - it's going to make the building look like a kids playhouse. It simply won't 'look' big enough for the player to walk into, nevermind stand in. I suggest doing something like this:



Now you might be wondering what that black space is. That's to show that there's an actual space, opening, in the wall once the player has opened the door. Otherwise, it gives the impression that they're opening a door and then walking into the wall xD
You can put your door events over this without a problem and it will look great in game.

Next - inside buildings.

These tiles are for inner walls/inside buildings etc.


Again, you really need to pay attention to how high the walls are. If the walls are only one square high, it looks impossible for people to live inside. Making walls at least two squares high looks more realistic, and you can play around with depth, like in the picture. Notice the walls are all 3 squares high except once you go up the stairs into that kitchen area, the walls are only 2 squares high.

Also, pay attention to, and make use of the shadow tile. This will REALLY add depth to your cities and towns and inside of houses etc.
Here's an example of a town from one of my projects:

[Show/Hide] Town

I think you show promise, but definately playtest your project often so you catch minor mistakes. I do believe I caught a couple spelling and grammar misshaps in the introduction of the game.

hey man thanks for the advice

[literarygoth]

No problem
I wasn't trying to be an ass. I can offer any help with mapping and some eventing if you'd like.
The only thing I will stress, is playtest playtest playtest! Yes it gets horridly annoying after you've gone through the beginning of your game 800 times, but it will be worth it for your players. Also, have a friend be an alpha tester - have them play your game and give them a questionnaire so that you can tweak things.

[Legacy]

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[Zinx10]

Epic tutorial litery. Yes it does get annoying testing the same thing over and over and over, but it will be worth it. My current project has been tested at least 50 times, minimum, just for 11 short levels.

[Rob_Riv]

• Firstly, how about renaming your topic? If everyone named their topics like you, every thread would be called "MY NEW RPG DEMO".
• ULTIMATUM doesn't really seem like a good name for a game.
• Your opening theme is Final Fantasy, really?
• Bad grammar.
• I'm repeating the point already mentioned that the window goes from clear in the middle to blue at the bottom. You clearly haven't even attempted to test and fix your game yourself.
• You're giving me all this exposition at the start of the game, but I'm not invested in the story or characters yet, so I'm not going to absorb this information. No-one will.
• What is this I don't even...
• Five chests just sitting around in your house. It does not look good.
• Lots of mapping errors.
• What? leaving your house leads to a world map... where a demon says "you have to beat me for my boat" or something, and then you fight two bats.
• Nearly got killed by the bats as I was blinded multiple times.
• Spelling mistakes
• No idea what I should do. I've been told not to go somewhere... that's all.
• So many mapping errors.
• Why do you get supplies from other cities if you don't trade?
• This makes no sense. I have no idea what's going on.
• ...lots of capitals
• Now he's trying to fight his father, the leader of the destiny warriors?
• I died... and now it's a game over. What the hell?
• Okay, did it all again, and defeated him. He's joined my party, he's level 99. How exactly did I defeat someone that experienced and strong?

Final Thoughts: I'm not exactly sure what the point in the demo was.

[SOLIDSTRIFER]

Epic tutorial litery. Yes it does get annoying testing the same thing over and over and over, but it will be worth it. My current project has been tested at least 50 times, minimum, just for 11 short levels.

how do i make screenshots?

• Firstly, how about renaming your topic? If everyone named their topics like you, every thread would be called "MY NEW RPG DEMO".
• ULTIMATUM doesn't really seem like a good name for a game.
• Your opening theme is Final Fantasy, really?
• Bad grammar.
• I'm repeating the point already mentioned that the window goes from clear in the middle to blue at the bottom. You clearly haven't even attempted to test and fix your game yourself.
• You're giving me all this exposition at the start of the game, but I'm not invested in the story or characters yet, so I'm not going to absorb this information. No-one will.
• What is this I don't even...
• Five chests just sitting around in your house. It does not look good.
• Lots of mapping errors.
• What? leaving your house leads to a world map... where a demon says "you have to beat me for my boat" or something, and then you fight two bats.
• Nearly got killed by the bats as I was blinded multiple times.
• Spelling mistakes
• No idea what I should do. I've been told not to go somewhere... that's all.
• So many mapping errors.
• Why do you get supplies from other cities if you don't trade?
• This makes no sense. I have no idea what's going on.
• ...lots of captials
• Now he's trying to fight his father, the leader of the destiny warriors?
• I died... and now it's a game over. What the hell?
• Okay, did it all again, and defeated him. He's joined my party, he's level 99. How exactly did I defeat someone that experienced and strong?

Final Thoughts: I'm not exactly sure what the point in the demo was.

ok for starters did u even read what anything says.?

and by the way You really aren't going to have the dad in the party for very long so yeah

The first house is basically a secluded area if you paid any attention to my intro you would have known why/

I also point out that they receive supplies because they have the Seifen,(destiny warrors, again you did not read the intro)

Epic tutorial litery. Yes it does get annoying testing the same thing over and over and over, but it will be worth it. My current project has been tested at least 50 times, minimum, just for 11 short levels.

how do i make screenshots?

• Firstly, how about renaming your topic? If everyone named their topics like you, every thread would be called "MY NEW RPG DEMO".
• ULTIMATUM doesn't really seem like a good name for a game.
• Your opening theme is Final Fantasy, really?
• Bad grammar.
• I'm repeating the point already mentioned that the window goes from clear in the middle to blue at the bottom. You clearly haven't even attempted to test and fix your game yourself.
• You're giving me all this exposition at the start of the game, but I'm not invested in the story or characters yet, so I'm not going to absorb this information. No-one will.
• What is this I don't even...
• Five chests just sitting around in your house. It does not look good.
• Lots of mapping errors.
• What? leaving your house leads to a world map... where a demon says "you have to beat me for my boat" or something, and then you fight two bats.
• Nearly got killed by the bats as I was blinded multiple times.
• Spelling mistakes
• No idea what I should do. I've been told not to go somewhere... that's all.
• So many mapping errors.
• Why do you get supplies from other cities if you don't trade?
• This makes no sense. I have no idea what's going on.
• ...lots of captials
• Now he's trying to fight his father, the leader of the destiny warriors?
• I died... and now it's a game over. What the hell?
• Okay, did it all again, and defeated him. He's joined my party, he's level 99. How exactly did I defeat someone that experienced and strong?

Final Thoughts: I'm not exactly sure what the point in the demo was.

ok for starters did u even read what anything says.?

and by the way You really aren't going to have the dad in the party for very long so yeah

The first house is basically a secluded area if you paid any attention to my intro you would have known why/

I also point out that they receive supplies because they have the Seifen,(destiny warriors, again you did not read the intro)

also if you actually researched the word Ultimatum you would know why i named it that way,
again you did not pay any attention to my intro

[Resource Dragon]

• Firstly, how about renaming your topic? If everyone named their topics like you, every thread would be called "MY NEW RPG DEMO".
• ULTIMATUM doesn't really seem like a good name for a game.
• Your opening theme is Final Fantasy, really?
• Bad grammar.
• I'm repeating the point already mentioned that the window goes from clear in the middle to blue at the bottom. You clearly haven't even attempted to test and fix your game yourself.
• You're giving me all this exposition at the start of the game, but I'm not invested in the story or characters yet, so I'm not going to absorb this information. No-one will.
• What is this I don't even...
• Five chests just sitting around in your house. It does not look good.
• Lots of mapping errors.
• What? leaving your house leads to a world map... where a demon says "you have to beat me for my boat" or something, and then you fight two bats.
• Nearly got killed by the bats as I was blinded multiple times.
• Spelling mistakes
• No idea what I should do. I've been told not to go somewhere... that's all.
• So many mapping errors.
• Why do you get supplies from other cities if you don't trade?
• This makes no sense. I have no idea what's going on.
• ...lots of captials
• Now he's trying to fight his father, the leader of the destiny warriors?
• I died... and now it's a game over. What the hell?
• Okay, did it all again, and defeated him. He's joined my party, he's level 99. How exactly did I defeat someone that experienced and strong?

Final Thoughts: I'm not exactly sure what the point in the demo was.

Roflmao! i cracked up reading your post XD

and to make screen shots, press the print screen button, or PrtSc.
then paste it in paint.

[Adrien.]

Epic tutorial litery. Yes it does get annoying testing the same thing over and over and over, but it will be worth it. My current project has been tested at least 50 times, minimum, just for 11 short levels.

how do i make screenshots?

• Firstly, how about renaming your topic? If everyone named their topics like you, every thread would be called "MY NEW RPG DEMO".
• ULTIMATUM doesn't really seem like a good name for a game.
• Your opening theme is Final Fantasy, really?
• Bad grammar.
• I'm repeating the point already mentioned that the window goes from clear in the middle to blue at the bottom. You clearly haven't even attempted to test and fix your game yourself.
• You're giving me all this exposition at the start of the game, but I'm not invested in the story or characters yet, so I'm not going to absorb this information. No-one will.
• What is this I don't even...
• Five chests just sitting around in your house. It does not look good.
• Lots of mapping errors.
• What? leaving your house leads to a world map... where a demon says "you have to beat me for my boat" or something, and then you fight two bats.
• Nearly got killed by the bats as I was blinded multiple times.
• Spelling mistakes
• No idea what I should do. I've been told not to go somewhere... that's all.
• So many mapping errors.
• Why do you get supplies from other cities if you don't trade?
• This makes no sense. I have no idea what's going on.
• ...lots of captials
• Now he's trying to fight his father, the leader of the destiny warriors?
• I died... and now it's a game over. What the hell?
• Okay, did it all again, and defeated him. He's joined my party, he's level 99. How exactly did I defeat someone that experienced and strong?

Final Thoughts: I'm not exactly sure what the point in the demo was.

ok for starters did u even read what anything says.?

and by the way You really aren't going to have the dad in the party for very long so yeah

The first house is basically a secluded area if you paid any attention to my intro you would have known why/

I also point out that they receive supplies because they have the Seifen,(destiny warrors, again you did not read the intro)

Epic tutorial litery. Yes it does get annoying testing the same thing over and over and over, but it will be worth it. My current project has been tested at least 50 times, minimum, just for 11 short levels.

how do i make screenshots?

• Firstly, how about renaming your topic? If everyone named their topics like you, every thread would be called "MY NEW RPG DEMO".
• ULTIMATUM doesn't really seem like a good name for a game.
• Your opening theme is Final Fantasy, really?
• Bad grammar.
• I'm repeating the point already mentioned that the window goes from clear in the middle to blue at the bottom. You clearly haven't even attempted to test and fix your game yourself.
• You're giving me all this exposition at the start of the game, but I'm not invested in the story or characters yet, so I'm not going to absorb this information. No-one will.
• What is this I don't even...
• Five chests just sitting around in your house. It does not look good.
• Lots of mapping errors.
• What? leaving your house leads to a world map... where a demon says "you have to beat me for my boat" or something, and then you fight two bats.
• Nearly got killed by the bats as I was blinded multiple times.
• Spelling mistakes
• No idea what I should do. I've been told not to go somewhere... that's all.
• So many mapping errors.
• Why do you get supplies from other cities if you don't trade?
• This makes no sense. I have no idea what's going on.
• ...lots of captials
• Now he's trying to fight his father, the leader of the destiny warriors?
• I died... and now it's a game over. What the hell?
• Okay, did it all again, and defeated him. He's joined my party, he's level 99. How exactly did I defeat someone that experienced and strong?

Final Thoughts: I'm not exactly sure what the point in the demo was.

ok for starters did u even read what anything says.?

and by the way You really aren't going to have the dad in the party for very long so yeah

The first house is basically a secluded area if you paid any attention to my intro you would have known why/

I also point out that they receive supplies because they have the Seifen,(destiny warriors, again you did not read the intro)

also if you actually researched the word Ultimatum you would know why i named it that way,
again you did not pay any attention to my intro

Dude being rude to rob is like asking for your ass to be kicked all over this site side ways

[SOLIDSTRIFER]

Epic tutorial litery. Yes it does get annoying testing the same thing over and over and over, but it will be worth it. My current project has been tested at least 50 times, minimum, just for 11 short levels.

how do i make screenshots?

• Firstly, how about renaming your topic? If everyone named their topics like you, every thread would be called "MY NEW RPG DEMO".
• ULTIMATUM doesn't really seem like a good name for a game.
• Your opening theme is Final Fantasy, really?
• Bad grammar.
• I'm repeating the point already mentioned that the window goes from clear in the middle to blue at the bottom. You clearly haven't even attempted to test and fix your game yourself.
• You're giving me all this exposition at the start of the game, but I'm not invested in the story or characters yet, so I'm not going to absorb this information. No-one will.
• What is this I don't even...
• Five chests just sitting around in your house. It does not look good.
• Lots of mapping errors.
• What? leaving your house leads to a world map... where a demon says "you have to beat me for my boat" or something, and then you fight two bats.
• Nearly got killed by the bats as I was blinded multiple times.
• Spelling mistakes
• No idea what I should do. I've been told not to go somewhere... that's all.
• So many mapping errors.
• Why do you get supplies from other cities if you don't trade?
• This makes no sense. I have no idea what's going on.
• ...lots of captials
• Now he's trying to fight his father, the leader of the destiny warriors?
• I died... and now it's a game over. What the hell?
• Okay, did it all again, and defeated him. He's joined my party, he's level 99. How exactly did I defeat someone that experienced and strong?

Final Thoughts: I'm not exactly sure what the point in the demo was.

ok for starters did u even read what anything says.?

and by the way You really aren't going to have the dad in the party for very long so yeah

The first house is basically a secluded area if you paid any attention to my intro you would have known why/

I also point out that they receive supplies because they have the Seifen,(destiny warrors, again you did not read the intro)

Epic tutorial litery. Yes it does get annoying testing the same thing over and over and over, but it will be worth it. My current project has been tested at least 50 times, minimum, just for 11 short levels.

how do i make screenshots?

• Firstly, how about renaming your topic? If everyone named their topics like you, every thread would be called "MY NEW RPG DEMO".
• ULTIMATUM doesn't really seem like a good name for a game.
• Your opening theme is Final Fantasy, really?
• Bad grammar.
• I'm repeating the point already mentioned that the window goes from clear in the middle to blue at the bottom. You clearly haven't even attempted to test and fix your game yourself.
• You're giving me all this exposition at the start of the game, but I'm not invested in the story or characters yet, so I'm not going to absorb this information. No-one will.
• What is this I don't even...
• Five chests just sitting around in your house. It does not look good.
• Lots of mapping errors.
• What? leaving your house leads to a world map... where a demon says "you have to beat me for my boat" or something, and then you fight two bats.
• Nearly got killed by the bats as I was blinded multiple times.
• Spelling mistakes
• No idea what I should do. I've been told not to go somewhere... that's all.
• So many mapping errors.
• Why do you get supplies from other cities if you don't trade?
• This makes no sense. I have no idea what's going on.
• ...lots of captials
• Now he's trying to fight his father, the leader of the destiny warriors?
• I died... and now it's a game over. What the hell?
• Okay, did it all again, and defeated him. He's joined my party, he's level 99. How exactly did I defeat someone that experienced and strong?

Final Thoughts: I'm not exactly sure what the point in the demo was.

ok for starters did u even read what anything says.?

and by the way You really aren't going to have the dad in the party for very long so yeah

The first house is basically a secluded area if you paid any attention to my intro you would have known why/

I also point out that they receive supplies because they have the Seifen,(destiny warriors, again you did not read the intro)

also if you actually researched the word Ultimatum you would know why i named it that way,
again you did not pay any attention to my intro

Dude being rude to rob is like asking for your ass to be kicked all over this site side ways

ok fine my bad rob

but he clearly didnt pay attention to the little things
its like doing a book report on a book you never read

im not tryin to be rude im just defending my clause
i apologize if i offended anyone

[Rob_Riv]

ok for starters did u even read what anything says.?

Yes.

and by the way You really aren't going to have the dad in the party for very long so yeah

My point wasn't about the fact that he was in your party, did you even read what anything says?

The first house is basically a secluded area if you paid any attention to my intro you would have known why/

It doesn't say that in your intro.

I also point out that they receive supplies because they have the Seifen,(destiny warrors, again you did not read the intro)

It doesn't say that in the intro. Again, you did not read the intro.

[Show/Hide] Your 346 word introduction.

Aithen, a world filled with life and prosperity.
A world of great peace
The nations of this
world never fought with one another.

Until one day a dark force came upon a king
of one of these
nations, this man was only
known to the world as SolidStrife.

SolidStrife saw the world as a gift from
the Gods.
He then proceded
on to conquer this world with his vast army

Many villages were burned down, Innocent people were
slaughtered.

The people began to lose hope. All seemed to be lost.
Until one day
a young man by the name of Leon,rose up
against the tyrant.

Leon fought the evil king's army, but he could not do it
on his own.

The people saw this bravery and joined him in his
campaign of freedom
The warriors who fought alongside Leon
were seen as heroes

The people saw them as warriors of fate and
declared them the warriors of Destiny.

The Gods on the other hand saw them as
the warriors of Seifen, the creator of this
world.

Many battles were fought, and many a great warrior
perished.
Nevertheless Leon pressed on his fight.
Then Seifen came before Leon.

The Seifen had been weakend because the people
lost their faith
and that was what kept him alive

Seifen gave Leon a propostion, if the war did
not end within 7 days he would give his final strength
to Leon in
the form of a destructive sword.

Nevertheless the war continued, and on the
7th day Leon recieved
the sword, the sword of Ultimatum.

He confronted SolidStrife in what was to be the final stand
of Leon's
troops and in one faithful swing of the sword the
entire nation of Solidstrife was gone.

The war was over, the people declared Leon their King.
But Leon saw the corruption of power he saw within
SolidStrife
And decided that he was to live a peaceful life.

He gave the Ultimatum to the Gods and told them to
never unleash
such a weapon again.

also if you actually researched the word Ultimatum you would know why i named it that way,
again you did not pay any attention to my intro

Why should I research it? I know what it means. Maybe you should research it? There was a sword called Ultimatum, Seifen said "if the war doesn't finish in seven days, I'll give you the sword to help you win", seven days later he gets the sword and swings it and the entire nation of 'Solidstrife' was gone. There's no ultimatum, there's not even any mention of a conversation between Leon and 'SolidStrife'.

You didn't seem to pay attention to my post.

• You're giving me all this exposition at the start of the game, but I'm not invested in the story or characters yet, so I'm not going to absorb this information. No-one will.

Which specific points, out of the twenty that I made, are in question here?

[Paper PokéMaste...]

@ SOLID
No one is going to read what it says because it's LAME to have a pointless intro like that. If you REALLY need that long intro, make there be a library with a history book in it.

Regardless of how long he's in the party, the dad needs to be a lower level. It is pointless and lame to have such a ridiculously high level party member at all.

You need to have an actual reason for things. It SHOULDN'T be in the intro, it should have an actual reason and explanation.

And, your post is ridiculously long because for some reason you thought it would be a brilliant idea to quote your entire post again and put a nonsensical sentence after.

[Adrien.]

ok fine my bad rob

but he clearly didnt pay attention to the little things
its like doing a book report on a book you never read

im not tryin to be rude im just defending my clause
i apologize if i offended anyone

It doesn't matter. By the looks of it he did read and play your game. he would not be able to give that much detailed feed back if he didn't.
Also, not caring here what the mods say, you NEED character bios, credits, screen shots, story and to follow the rules of this forum before posting a game. you can't just be like "OMGZ my l33t game try now!!!!" and leave it at that. we need more detail. whats the game about? what does it look like? who are the characters? what are there motives for the things they do? do you use scripts? what do your maps look like "Screen shots." Take a look at other peoples threads and see how they (most) have followed the rules.

Being rude to a mod is still a major thing, even if he is not a forum mod. Being rude to any one giving your advice is not going to get you very far.

~ You should care about what the mods say because backseat moderating is against the rules. Report the post instead please.
-Harryb412

[SOLIDSTRIFER]

ok fine my bad rob

but he clearly didnt pay attention to the little things
its like doing a book report on a book you never read

im not tryin to be rude im just defending my clause
i apologize if i offended anyone

It doesn't matter. By the looks of it he did read and play your game. he would not be able to give that much detailed feed back if he didn't.
Also, not caring here what the mods say, you NEED character bios, credits, screen shots, story and to follow the rules of this forum before posting a game. you can't just be like "OMGZ my l33t game try now!!!!" and leave it at that. we need more detail. whats the game about? what does it look like? who are the characters? what are there motives for the things they do? do you use scripts? what do your maps look like "Screen shots." Take a look at other peoples threads and see how they (most) have followed the rules.

Being rude to a mod is still a major thing, even if he is not a forum mod. Being rude to any one giving your advice is not going to get you very far.

im just sayin that you guys could have sugar coated it a bit =(
and its a W.I.P for CHRISTS SAKE!
its not even completed yet!

[Adrien.]

ok fine my bad rob

but he clearly didnt pay attention to the little things
its like doing a book report on a book you never read

im not tryin to be rude im just defending my clause
i apologize if i offended anyone

It doesn't matter. By the looks of it he did read and play your game. he would not be able to give that much detailed feed back if he didn't.
Also, not caring here what the mods say, you NEED character bios, credits, screen shots, story and to follow the rules of this forum before posting a game. you can't just be like "OMGZ my l33t game try now!!!!" and leave it at that. we need more detail. whats the game about? what does it look like? who are the characters? what are there motives for the things they do? do you use scripts? what do your maps look like "Screen shots." Take a look at other peoples threads and see how they (most) have followed the rules.

Being rude to a mod is still a major thing, even if he is not a forum mod. Being rude to any one giving your advice is not going to get you very far.

im just sayin that you guys could have sugar coated it a bit =(
and its a W.I.P for CHRISTS SAKE!
its not even completed yet!

doesn't matter if its not completed this is games under construction. what you want then is to ask a mod to move your game to game theory and design. Even then you still have to have specific details about your game, like what is the story, who are the characters? what are there motives for the things they do? who do credits go to for the scripts? screen shots?

Also its not about sugar coating things, its about being honest. Rob gave you his honest feed back on the game. and if you dont like it then tough cookies sun shine. This is the real world, your mom isn't going to sugar coat the truth, neither are your employers. So if you are going to start crying over serious feed back, to which i would suck up like a sponge, go back to the drawing board and reavluate then i dont think the real world is going to like you, never mind you it.

Capital letters for angry statements makes no sense. WIP or not you still need to provide these details. Again, maybe this is better suited for game theory and design where you can be like "I have this demo, its not yet completes, i dont have much story or characters could ya tell me what you think.

You need to learn to read the rules before posting.

also even if you do move this, people will still give you there UN SUGAR coated truth

[The Rooster]

"He didn't sugarcoat it" isn't even remotely close to a valid reason to ignore feedback and tell someone they're full of shit. Robin wasn't an ass about it, so unless your definition of horrible criticism is not telling you what was great about your game before and after listing your various fuck-ups, then no criticism will ever be enough, because if someone like Robin isn't telling you what you did well, chances are you didn't do anything well. But now you've caught my interest, and I guess soon enough you'll find out what real asshole criticism is.

[Harryb412]

Didn't add the required information to the thread in the 48 hours given, moving this to the appropriate forum -Game Theory and Design.
When you have the required information for this forum [check the rules and Regashi's post] PM me or another mod to get it moved back.

[SOLIDSTRIFER]

"He didn't sugarcoat it" isn't even remotely close to a valid reason to ignore feedback and tell someone they're full of shit. Robin wasn't an ass about it, so unless your definition of horrible criticism is not telling you what was great about your game before and after listing your various fuck-ups, then no criticism will ever be enough, because if someone like Robin isn't telling you what you did well, chances are you didn't do anything well. But now you've caught my interest, and I guess soon enough you'll find out what real asshole criticism is.

ok then bro and by the way I know how life can be a bitch as well, after all I'm currently enrolled in a university at this moment and yeah it's a bitch.
What i was looking for was a type of Inspiration from you people, all i got was a giant slap in the face.

But hey if thats how you guys treat a person who just wanted some advice then thats cool.

I just wished that you people approached this in a rather kinder tone considering the fact that I am a complete noob in this "business".