QUOTE (X-M-O @ Nov 1 2011, 09:49 PM)
Nice work on this one. =D
I love the thought process that this character has; really a treat for someone who has dabbled in psychology. ^^
I only have a qualm with this part:
He would rot in jail. Yes you will, you son of a bitch! And whether or not I burn in the fires of Hell, I don’t care! Nothing mattered now, only sweet justice.
I'm not sure if it's intentional, but the jump from 'he' to 'you' I found quite jarring. And I'm sure the tenses are off at some point (perhaps 'matters' instead of 'mattered).
However, your character seems a little bit nuts, so this could be put down to them.
The thought processes are beautiful nonetheless.