QUOTE (Shaddowval @ Sep 16 2012, 03:31 AM)
It is not so much of your character being flawed or not, it's more of a lack of information. It seems pretty interesting in concept, yet we know so little about the world or the characters personality, what she looks like, age, likes, dislikes, things of that nature. You can improve this a lot by adding in some of that information, to help flesh out the character, also maybe some information on who the other people mentioned are would help too.
You've left a lot to our imaginations, which isn't always a bad thing, but in this case we know nothing else to compare too, so we cannot get a good picture of what the character is like. If you'd like I can provide a kind of template that gives you some basic info which is useful to fill out for your characters to show them to other people.
I will put the information in a list and I will also have add some pictures.
This post has been edited by ashtoban: Oct 4 2012, 05:22 PM