Help Strawberry's Motivation Options

[Strawberry]

INTRODUCTION
This thread's purpose is to help boost my motivation, by helping my creativity. Got a favorite story? Tell me! Know which one intrigues you, but could use work? Tell me that too! Like my character design/backgrounds or just the story in general? You know the drill. XD

One last thing. Tell me how I should present a particular story. Like as a game, book, graphic novel, etc.

Basically, just help me out. ^^;



STORY
Surrounded by pirate-infested waters, humans are forced to live on the Mainland - most of them too scared to explore the rest of the world. Known to man are two races: Earthborn and Windkiin. A judge, known only for his power, begins an expedition in the seas. Comette - a young noble - mourns for her fiance who never showed up on at their wedding. When her parents find her new future husband, she flees from home. A clue leading her to her fiance, causes Comette to go on a search for him.


LADY COMETTE
Age: 20
Race: Windkiin
Height: 5'2"
Weight: 132 lbs
Occupation: Noble
Weapon:
The youngest child of House *blank*, and niece to King Charles Kinsbury of Albannia. She detests the lady-like mannerisms and activities that are expected of her. Comette tends to do things excessively, such as keeping all her clothes and items in certain places. Due to an accident years ago, her wings are paralyzed.

IDEA 2

STORY
Deep within a seemingly enchanted forest, sits the peaceful village of Feywood - a hamlet protected by a barrier. On the day of young Amarira's birthday, she is kidnapped by young dragonic man named Draig and is taken outside of the village for the first time.


AMARIRA ELERETH
Age: 16
Race:
Height: 5'0"
Weight: 98 lbs
Occupation: Unemployed
Weapon: 1-handed sword
Amarira is the only child of farmers. She is often found alone, playing with the local animals or her friends. Curious about the outside world, she has a great sense of adventure, though she is scared of leaving everyone behind.



STORY
The world of Xale is a planet ruled by beings known as Divinities - spirits that control the weather. When one dies or passes on their duties, a new one is created using a powerful soul contained in a Ghost Crystal. Divinities fall asleep during seasons that go against what they create. They normally slumber in shrines across the world, only woken up by the voice of a Stonesinger Maiden.

Recently, Maidens who have ventured into the shrines have not returned.

The story follows Aelina Rowan, a bard living in the Archipelago of Icespire, in the village of Evertear. After being arrested for Necromancy and escorted to the castle, she is appointed the new Stonesinger Maiden.

Along with Narie Tearwyn, the twin sister of the last known Maiden for the Divinity of Gale from the Kono Highlands, Aelina will investigate the mysterious disappearances of the last several Maidens.


AELINA ROWAN
Age: 20
Race: Frost Sidhe
Height: 5'2"
Weight: 114 lbs
Occupation: Bard
Weapon: Death Scythe
The heroine of the story, Aelina is a songstress working at the local lodge in Evertear of the Icespire Archipelago. She enjoys baking sweets and gardening in her free time. She reluctantly becomes the next Stonesinger Maiden. Aelina is a very affectionate woman who is thoughtful and generous towards others, caring about their feelings. Although she has a seemingly soft and gentle disposition, something is odd about her - as at times she can be quite sarcastic with her creepy sense of humor.

IDEA 4

STORY
There was a gentle widower who had married a fiercly independent woman as his second wife - who had a daughter who was just as haughty as her mother. From his first wife, however, the man had a young daughter with a sweet disposition. After his death, the young girl was forced to work for her stepmother and sister for a small amount of food. With revenge, the daughter set their house on fire, killing the horrible stepmother. Several years later, she turned her revenge on the sister...


ERY MONTROSE
Age: 23
Race: Human
Height: 5'6"
Weight: 134 lbs
Occupation:
Weapon: Bow and dagger
Once a girl with a soft disposition, Ery is now a grown woman with a deep hatred against others. The only person she seems to love and care about, is her husband - Ser Calden Ironmark, whom she met at a ball years earlier. After her love embarks for a war and never returns, she embarks on a journey to find him.



STORY
Set in the fantasy world of Valena, the Royal City of Launus is the lively capital of the Ebion continent, ruled by King *blank* Natheen. Crime is a common occurance in the city, making Rysen Dalargo a busy man. After a chance encounter with a young priestess named Lyn Allura and her best friend Auluna Sanette, the three of them work together to solve mysteries and uphold the Law.All who disobey the Law, must answer to the Knight Commander, Kran Hunter. Those that do not answer their crimes...


LYNETTE "LYN" ALLURA
Age: 19
Race: Ameeko
Height: 3'6"
Weight: 35 lbs
Occupation: Priestess
Weapon: 1-handed sword
The daughter of infamous thieves that were recently caught, Lyn is just as greedy as her parents. Even so, she strongly believes in the Goddess and became a priestess to serve her, and there she became best friends with a halfling girl.


CORINNE RAUTIO
Age: 23
Race: Faerune
Height: 5'6"
Weight: 137 lbs
Occupation: Courier
Weapon: Staff
She is the protaganist of the events that occur before Memoirs of Valena, and the daughter of a blacksmith and weaver. Corinne has been known to be flirtatious towards various males, using her voluptous body to get what she desires.

IDEA 6

STORY
The year is 2076, and nuclear explosions has expanded across all of America - mutating animals and making humans insane, even superhuman like. Those that were hidden away in shelters, try to live a normal life as best as they can inside cities surrounded by large walls.


MINA WINTERS
Age: 15
Race: Human
Height: 5'1"
Weight: 120 lbs
Occupation: Student
Weapon: N/A
Mina lived a normal life until she was ten years old, when a diseased musquito bit her - causing her to become ill. Now she takes monthly injections to prevent mutation. She is currently studying to be a doctor and plays the flute in her school band.

IDEA 7

STORY
Ages ago, gods created and ruled the Earth. However, their leader, Zeus caused a massive war between the gods, which eventually destroyed all of them. Now, in the modern era, there signs of a new Zeus rising...


Age: 24
Race: Human
Height: 5'5"
Weight: 124 lbs
Occupation: Student (studying to be a laywer)
Weapon:
A stoic and stern college student who lives with her mother, stepfather and younger sister, Nelly. She later finds out she is the reincarnated Persephone. She enjoys reading about history and science.

[Cleril]

First story and I have no interest. I have no desire for pirates, cliche marriage/romance stuff, etc.

Second story could be very interesting to me if it was focused on the psychology of each of the main characters and while you could have a cliche romance between them, I'd prefer to see how you would write a story without romance as an option in this scenario.

The third "story" is just a setup for a story. You're just telling me things that the player would know in about 5 seconds as of starting the game. That's not enough to tell you anything useful.

In the fourth I'm playing as a psychotic nutcase? While that's perfectly fine, it's ultimately one dimensional if we're starting the game from the point of her going after her sister. If you had the game include everything before that and made the girl multidimensional it might work.

Five is also a setup for a story, not an actual story to provide feedback on.

You wrote up the sixth story description rather oddly and once again it's just a story setup, not a story. Grammar time:

"The year is 2076, and nuclear explosions have expanded across all of America; (hyphens are used to connect words, semicolons connect sentences that rely on each other) mutating animals and making humans insane, even superhuman like This is a run on sentence. Those (Who the hell are "those"? Are they human still? Or are they other creatures? that were hidden away in shelters Hidden how? Are they being imprisoned or what? Also, no comma needed. try to live a normal life as best as they can inside cities surrounded by large walls."

The story itself is drastically dull. Future time period with people being oppressed in their way of life. No interest, too cliche.

Number seven is again a setup, not a story. And for the love of my eyes is it so very contrived. Gods are such dull creatures when put on pedestals, if you're going to have any gods in your games at least make them like they are in their mythical legends. Greek and Roman gods were practically pricks, the whole lot of em.

[Strawberry]

Thanks for you input - but I wanted to let you know, only Ghost Shards is a game. LOL.

The rest are ideas for stories. Comics OR games. XD

But what you said, was actually very helpful. Most of them are barebones, but if one is intriguing maybe I can expand it? Or get help expanding it. But I'd like to know if what I have so far is decent enough to start something.

Though, since my fiance and I writing them, romance might not be able to be avoidable. I don't know, though. /shrug

EDIT:

Though, you forgot to mention my dull character design of my female heroines. Lols.

[Cleril]

Thanks for you input - but I wanted to let you know, only Ghost Shards is a game. LOL.

The rest are ideas for stories. Comics OR games. XD

But what you said, was actually very helpful. Most of them are barebones, but if one is intriguing maybe I can expand it? Or get help expanding it. But I'd like to know if what I have so far is decent enough to start something.

Though, since my fiance and I writing them, romance might not be able to be avoidable. I don't know, though. /shrug

EDIT:

Though, you forgot to mention my dull character design of my female heroines. Lols.

Ah, well, go figure. I only know how to write for poetry, prose, and video games.

Only number two is a surefire green light to me. The rest are either setups or completely crap (in my opinion, it's just subject matter I have no interest in).

The romance thing is a weak excuse to me. Do you only discuss romance with said fiance? If not then I don't see how that is a valid reason for forced romance stories.

Isn't calling them dull yourself answering your question as to why I didn't mention them?

[Strawberry]

Well, it's just that we make two characters that we like, and we enjoy putting them together. It's quite simple, actually. For example, all those female characters? They are what I came up. He comes up with the males. And since their our characters, we usually put them together. But we try not to make soooo... I don't know... Forced?

For example. In memoirs of Valena, his character: Noko is married to Merri - a character I did not create. It was originally Corinne who was my character, but I told him it was too cliche so we changed it. There won't ALWAYS be romance, but I wouldn't leave it out either. Some people like romance. I actually hate romance in stories, because it's too cheesy for me - but if it's done right, I won't mind. /shrug

Well, couldn't tell me who or what you like and help improve what you didn't like? I'm trying to raise my creativity here - which boosts my motivation for doing what I love doing.

Thanks for replying.

[Cleril]

Well, it's just that we make two characters that we like, and we enjoy putting them together. It's quite simple, actually. For example, all those female characters? They are what I came up. He comes up with the males. And since their our characters, we usually put them together. But we try not to make soooo... I don't know... Forced?

For example. In memoirs of Valena, his character: Noko is married to Merri - a character I did not create. It was originally Corinne who was my character, but I told him it was too cliche so we changed it. There won't ALWAYS be romance, but I wouldn't leave it out either. Some people like romance. I actually hate romance in stories, because it's too cheesy for me - but if it's done right, I won't mind. /shrug

Well, couldn't tell me who or what you like and help improve what you didn't like? I'm trying to raise my creativity here - which boosts my motivation for doing what I love doing.

Thanks for replying.

Here's something for you to chew on:

All of your drawings, visually, they're too perfect. They're all too pretty to be anything but dull. Here, go ahead and look at one of my drawings:

http://cleril.deviantart.com/#/d4rmoqc

None of your drawings tell me any of the characters demeanor, or perhaps none of them tell me anything about their story you associate them with.

Ery Montrose doesn't look angry, stuck up at most. The drawing might as well be called "Generic woman any man would like to have relations with X." All of them are very beautiful, but beautiful is not what makes good characters. They need flaws, physical, and mental. None of your drawings have flaws, therefore, they are uninteresting, dull as you put it.

My drawing has flaws, the mouth is missing, the ears are probably too big, and the nose isn't quite dimensional. The only absolute positive in my drawing is the sculpted eyes that truly tell you that the figure is screaming. Note that it's shitty image quality so you might not be able to get the full impact.

Let me show an example of flawed drawing that isn't my own: http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/t...-The_Scream.jpg

The picture is very agitated, distorted, and not at all naturalistic. The figures in the background are practically scenery, and the main characters pose is probably impossible to perform; at least very uncomfortable. It's these inconsistences, these flaws, that make that picture so very, very captivating.

None, absolutely none of your drawings seen here are in anyway interesting or memorable. Like I said, "Generic woman any man would like to have relations with X."

Your homework assignment is to draw something flawed. Anything, just give it some reasons for existing. None of your other drawings show me a reason for them to exist, they're dull.

And remember to laugh when you do it. Or scream, whatever floats your boat.