QUOTE (Hirei @ Feb 4 2012, 07:32 PM)
Some things I can suggest right off the bat:
1. Watch your toning: I can see toning leaks.
2. Panels: You forgot to erase some lines
3. Text; Spacing needs a little more work and the font needs to be something easier to read than Poor Richard.
4. There is a lot of white space around the page.
I see what you mean. Text especially because usually I use a protractor to create my panels; and the measure I usually go for is 150 to trace each vertical line on both sides of the page. That really pacts the images inside the panels closer together, which will leave no more room for text, so I'am surely going to start looking out for those. Maybe not in this comic book as I already have everything done in regards to sketching but thanks for pointing that out. The white spaces around the panels are going to be trimmed once the book is ready to be presented. The white space inside the panels, however, is something me and a couple of friends thought would be okay since this book is technically a flashback and since this is really our first go around at creating a comic with anime we felt it would be best to get the basics out of our style first before attempting to include backgrounds and such. But surely this will be carefully looked upon as we approach the second book.
Toning leaks...I have to be honest I don't exactly know what toning leaks are...=/
Unless you mean applying less emphasis on the shadows? I'll have to be filled in on that one.
No wait it took a while to register but yeah the toning leaks does look pretty bad around Soukei's design. I honestly wasn't paying close enough attention after I exported it. At the moment I'am using Manga Studio Debut 4 and the toning and such is something I still have to get around to, especially since this is really my first time using a drawing pad. Hopefully in time the experience will start to show itself and we'll be able to present better works of art for you guys.
This post has been edited by Spirit_Master_X: Feb 4 2012, 10:34 PM