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[-dah0rst-]

Woah, looks amazing- but i guess does aren't tiles?

Also something (I hope) amazing for you:
My bump mapping so far. This calculates light based on a hight map, resolving in much more scene fitting light, also textures look more realistic if you use the right height map:

[Show/Hide] Just a little screenshot.

And don't you dare nagging about the mapping- it's for test reasons only.

Also, some screenshots/ maps from my recent project, Swamplands:

[Show/Hide] Swamplands

And yes, I'm using RTP (and I like it)- all scripts/ effects scripted by myself.

[kayden997]

@-dah0rst-
Scripted by yourself? Man! I wish I could have that ability... Along with art, writing, and mapping
Oh well.

Your swamp map looks questionable, like the grass part being in the water. It doesn't seem to blend in well.
The reflections are awesome! I do wonder how you do them?

The ancient tome... Cave... What ever you call it looks really great. The fog running through the air is perfect.

I've tried stuff with bump map and lighting; although it does bring out texture it still doesn't fit.
Can't quite put my finger on it... Maybe it's the shading that's missing.

[Sinchross]

@-dah0rst->> WOW

The effect only works with tiles or can be used with pictures? It's amazing!!!

[-dah0rst-]

Which effect do exactly mean?
Maybe I'll post a tutorial on reflections and so on if i find time. Currently i have to learn a lot for my studies

Also I maybe upload a script suite soon, with bump lighting, mirror effects, fog, real time shadows. Let's see...

Here is the mirror script, if you want to test it:
(This is WIP code, i know it's not optimized for all the hackers and serious coders out there)

You should know that I use the Parallex for my water, so the mirror images will be displayed above the parallex but below all tiles. I use a modified Tileset:

[Show/Hide] TileA1

[Show/Hide] Code

CODE

class Spriteset_Map

  alias initialize2 initialize
  alias update2 update
  alias dispose2 dispose
  
  def initialize
    initialize2
    create_reflection
  end
    
  def update
    update2
    update_reflection
  end
    
  def dispose
    dispose2
    dispose_reflection
  end
  
  def create_reflection
    @mirror_sprites = []
    for i in $game_map.events.keys.sort
      if $game_map.events[i].priority_type>0
        sprite = Sprite_Character.new(@viewport1, $game_map.events[i])
        @mirror_sprites.push(sprite)
      end
    end
    for vehicle in $game_map.vehicles
      sprite = Sprite_Character.new(@viewport1, vehicle)
      @mirror_sprites.push(sprite)
    end
    sprite=Sprite_Character.new(@viewport1, $game_player)
    @mirror_sprites.push(sprite)
  end

  def update_reflection
     for sprite in @mirror_sprites
      sprite.update
      sprite.z=-99
      sprite.wave_amp=1
      sprite.bush_depth=100
      sprite.opacity=190
      sprite.bush_opacity=100
      sprite.mirror=true
      sprite.angle=180
      wave_length=4
    end
  end
  
  def dispose_reflection
    for sprite in @mirror_sprites
      sprite.dispose
    end
  end
  
end

[Zinx10]

Looking pretty nice, -dah0rst-.

I was wondering what you all thought about my shop map:


I noticed I am fairly bad at interior mapping, so I would like as much critique as possible. Also, here is the tileset I am using:

[X-M-O]

You guys really need to start crediting these resources.
No one will know who to credit when they are used. =\

If you're confused about the purpose of this topic, then you should re-read the topic's rules:

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[Saul95]

But wait, you could not leave the topic open and then open the screenshot on a pixel art and / or graphics? So it would be neater.

[-dah0rst-]

@Zinx

I have one big problem with this map- if someone comes into the shop, the first thing he sees is a big fat wall. In normal cases, when you come into a shop, the counter is right in front of you or at the left side, and the first thing you should see are the goods. Also make the room smaller if you don't have something to fill it. Sometimes small rooms are more atmospheric and realistic than gigantic halls.
But keep on, you're on the right way

[Vexus]

I'm doing some custom icons for my game and would like to hear some criticism.

These are edits of normal icons with photoshop and paint:


Water Ring.

Heavy axe.

Iron Sword.

War Axe.

Long Bow.

Rusty Axe.

Rusty Short Sword.


The last one is the least I like but I couldn't think of other ways to do the lightning ring.

In my game most weapons have 3 variation levels (Ex. short sword, sword, long sword) and I'm doing their icon depending on their actual names since I'm using a cbs that shows the icon as weapon while attacking.

[Jens of Zanicuud]

Uhm... they're all really good except the last.

I suggest you use a ring with a yellow gem (a topaz?) embedded, much like the water ring...
You could add some sparkiling effect with Photoshop, in order to recall thunders&lightnings too, but definitely a ring with a small lightning on isn't that good.

Jens

[Vexus]

Yea... last one will probably be changed I'll see what I can do (I thought about using a yellow gem with low opacity and showing the thunder underneath it.)

[Oceans Dream]

@zinx:


Try using a door from here or something. The one you have really stands out and doesn't fit the style.

[Zinx10]

@-dah0rst- and OceansDream
Is this better?


Also, Ocean, where did you get that chipset? The wall and carpet patterns are identical. If I can, I will try to keep the art away from pre-made games.

This post has been edited by Zinx_therpgmaker: Feb 17 2012, 01:35 PM

[-dah0rst-]

Don't make the room that big. This shopkeeper seems lost in this huge environment. Use more black areas, and imagine how the store would be layouted if it was a real store.

[Zinx10]

Is this any better?

[Vexus]

Your shop is very empty.

Seeing your tileset, you provide tables in the shop but nothing on them. While there could be houses with diagonal walls, being blocky it doesn't make it look good so I suggest you to make the room squarish.

Here's an example of a shop of mine:

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It's simple, has enough space for moving and the possibility of having npcs in the room and has details here and there so that the room doesn't seem empty.

I suggest you to do something similar to this:

[Show/Hide]

I made it really quick but still basing the idea around the stuff available in your tileset (Which is very limited mind you). It still has empty spaces but looks better this way and you can experiment into adding more stuff to make it look better like more columns, npcs in the shop, pictures on the walls, etc.

If you got some character sprite of side torches it would make it look better too but that is up to you.

Hope these tips can provide you with some help

This post has been edited by Vexus: Feb 19 2012, 03:32 AM

[Sinchross]

I Agree with vexus and think that you do something like of his exemple the shop will be good. ^^'

A new photo of my vilage:

[Show/Hide] Mais uma

A video:



This post has been edited by Sinchross: Feb 20 2012, 12:53 PM

[Kaimi]

@Zinx_therpgmaker: first: you should make the interior more square or rectangular in shape as now it looks unnaturally; second: depending on what the shopkeeper has to offer, decor the interior accordingly, e.g.: weapon seller would have wide selection of swords, spears, bows, rods, and such; armour dealer would have wide selection of shields, chesplates, boots, helms, and such.

And some screenshots (link to my DeviantArt account; notes at images' descriptions) from my game:

[Show/Hide] A Lively Fellow

[Show/Hide] A Beach Witch

[Show/Hide] A Minigame

Currently, I'm struggling with battle system the most, but it's not for this type of a thread.

[X-M-O]

I've noticed that even after posting the rules up a second time, people seem to be ignoring the purpose of this thread.
This is not a screenshot thread.
Please read the first post of this topic as there have been a couple changes.

Note that disregarding the rules of this topic will result in a warn, so please do not continue to post without first knowing the rules.

Also note that for screenshots, see this topic.

Thanks! =]


For your convenience, I'm quoting the first post of this topic here:

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[AbsoluteIce]

What do you guys think about this logo
I made?

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