Since my review is a little more insulting than the forum mods will allow, I'll try to summarize my problems with the game here, in shorthand.
1) Your grammar is terrible. How is this game marked as "Complete" when almost every text box presents either a typo or a grammatical error? And regardless, even ignoring the grammar, your writing doesn't flow very well. Characters don't seem like they're talking, so much as saying things you made them say. Also the character portraits taking up 60% of the text box? A terrible idea.
2) Your characters are unintelligent and unlikable. It should also be said that your introduction fell flat on its face raising more questions than world lore, but the main problem here is characters. The main character is generally unemotive and uncaring, and if this was suppose to be a trait for development, it wasn't conveyed very well. Regardless, ALL your characters come off as unlikable and unintelligent, and it stems from the fact that nothing makes any sense, which stems from your writing lacking human emotion or conveyance.
For example, rather than go hell-bent over his army faction or troop or whatever's location, why isn't the character baffled at the fact that he just fought Golems in a burning, exploding underground room? Could he not have made any passive remark about this turn of events? I mean, regardless of how hell-bent over something I might ever be, I'd still question how the heck I woke up in a burning stone building buried underground, who put me there, and what other secrets the complex held. THAT should have been the primary focus here, not some daddy issues over lost time and selective amnesia. That could, and probably SHOULD come later, considering he has no recollection of events then to now. His reaction is entirely inhumane, and incredibly ignorant -- and not in a good way.
3) Your characters are perverted ass-hats. This is not an endearing trait, this is hateful and sexist. And it effectively makes me want to see the villain win (also because the villain had more emotion than the protagonist, and was decently interesting).