Shawn's Story-A thousand years' journey, To live a thousand years is to live with a thousand farewells... Options

[AphidRuin]

Nice game,and I enjoyed the whole demo being quite addicted, but mainly for the battle system and the features.

I have seen many people saying that your mapping is not quite good,but I feel that it applies only to the front part of the game.I saw many bad maps in Chapter 1,like Ehira being so empty and everything's apparently all HOUSES AND HOUSES.Add more varieties to your maps and colors to make players more interested.

It's quite funny that it has been no post for such a long time XD.I understood the story, but with much difficulties though.Try to get someone to check on your grammar and sentence structure.

I laughed at some parts in Chapter 1 too. Anyway,good luck for your project. I am only at the Sea of Baus.So,I might try Chapter 2 later.

Thanks for your comment!

Interesting story, though I might suggest a few grammatical corrections and a more refined story, you kind of jump into these immortals and the Ehira and Kanth, without exactly explaining who and what they are. If you would like any help, I would be more then happy to offer my assistance, I would also suggest recruiting some other people to work on this project, as it is extremely hard to work on a project alone.

He's an artist, not a writer. As is obvious from the art. I'm more of a programmer than an artist. As is obvious from my art.

Emmm....I'm not really sure who are you referring to, or neither what are you trying to convey. Sorry but can you please make it slightly clearer?

[bulmabriefs144]

Referring to his critique on your spelling and grammar. Your artwork (battlesets for instance) in this game is good enough that it probably doesn't matter, unless it's atrocious. Likewise, my coding is pretty good, but except when I was editing other people's art, my mapping and stuff isn't all that hot. That's what I was saying.

[AphidRuin]

Ermm...now I know what you mean.

I feel a bit strange now. previous people where like saying how my mapping was horrible, yet now there are 2 polls on the mapping?! Are they being sarcastic in the sense, or they agree that my mapping improved? I feel a bit confused and puzzled

Anyway, thanks for everyone's support and Shawn's Story will be building towards a great game!

This post has been edited by AphidRuin: Jul 13 2011, 07:12 AM

[AphidRuin]

A long time since I have been viewing my post

Just to give some updates, I have received some complaints on the dialogues being too plain, thus I included Ccoa's UMS(Universal Message System). I decided to make facesets of the characters and change the default font from Arial to Tahoma. There is also a comment on my map that it is far too huge, thus I'll be needing a decent mapper to help me check as well as remap those old maps which looked too dull and ugly. Any interested please visit my Recruitment post at the according sub-forum.

Do look forward to the new demo with new events as I have hired a professional RMXP eventer to check on my events!

[AphidRuin]

Hello people, long time no see!

Since 2 months ago, I have decided to leave my work for a moment while I concentrate on the exams. Anyway, now the exams are over, and I'm getting back on track!

I have just finished my Ceerp Forest, and now moving on to Khoven's Infiltration.

I am in need of an eventer to edit and correct errors of my events, as well as improving them if necessary. I know what I am seriously lacking is the skill to make events 'epic' enough for the scenes, since I am still not very familiarise with RMXP.
I did hire an eventer before, but after editing the first few maps, he mysteriously disappeared. Therefore, I am needing another one as to check the remaining maps and then, publish a new demo extending up to Ceerp Forest.

I hope for everyone's continous support!

[Milonar]

I can help you a bit about Maps and check Events. Hahaha, I'm still following your topic, so keep up the work!

This post has been edited by Milonar: Oct 14 2011, 06:49 PM

[supercow]

uhh,.....yeah the map really need to improve very bland and masive without purpose.
upon entering castle i only find book shelf and nothing else...i find this very odd and yet intrigue to why that is cuz some ppl just put random/lots of things inside a castle.
i get lost in the sense of direction cuz it didnt exactly tell me, i just walk around until i find the right direction.
the villager/npc looked like a walking zombie need some activity or something...
i think u should change the background pict of shop/etc and not the original pict that came with it so it would look like ur playing someone elses game.
stoy....i dunno i dont follow it sorry im not that good at following story, but it seems the flow of story is a bit rushed.
maybe use some program like (audio cleaning) to decrease audio size so its not massively large (140+mb)
if ur not using all audio/pict dont put them all up, might be a good time to organize (i dunno about this but did u really use all that?)

was really looking forward to play a good game when i look at the title screen, but if ur new to it than i guess its fine for starter
btw who made the title screen? its not that bright (although it might need a bit for ambience) but i like it most ppl just use photoshop to brighten it (too much even), title screen and bgm are the only positive i see.

[AphidRuin]

I can help you a bit about Maps and check Events. Hahaha, I'm still following your topic, so keep up the work!

Thank you so much. Until now, I had never received any news from my Eventer. Maybe when my mapper is done editing with my map, I'll send you the new copy of the project.Thanks for your support!

uhh,.....yeah the map really need to improve very bland and masive without purpose.
upon entering castle i only find book shelf and nothing else...i find this very odd and yet intrigue to why that is cuz some ppl just put random/lots of things inside a castle.
i get lost in the sense of direction cuz it didnt exactly tell me, i just walk around until i find the right direction.
the villager/npc looked like a walking zombie need some activity or something...
i think u should change the background pict of shop/etc and not the original pict that came with it so it would look like ur playing someone elses game.
stoy....i dunno i dont follow it sorry im not that good at following story, but it seems the flow of story is a bit rushed.
maybe use some program like (audio cleaning) to decrease audio size so its not massively large (140+mb)
if ur not using all audio/pict dont put them all up, might be a good time to organize (i dunno about this but did u really use all that?)

was really looking forward to play a good game when i look at the title screen, but if ur new to it than i guess its fine for starter
btw who made the title screen? its not that bright (although it might need a bit for ambience) but i like it most ppl just use photoshop to brighten it (too much even), title screen and bgm are the only positive i see.

Thanks for your comment! I'll certainly take your remarks as points for improvements.

Firstly, about the Ehira Castle. Because this is my first game, my mappings and eventings isn't that good at the part I have been planning for a big reconstruction for Ehira, since it is an important city for epic events happening later in the story I've told my mapper to reorganise the Ehira Junction, and after receiving the new areas I'll get back to the castle....as well as redoing all the instructions for easy purposes. I believe the part where you are facing problems is where you are going to Regias' Mansion and when you are going for the Ehira Forest, yes?

Secondly, thanks for pointing out the NPC problem. If any chance I'll make them move more freely.

Thirdly, about the background. It has always been my problem; using default sources. But I promise, this would only be temporarily. But I would be needing an artist, since I totally have no idea of creating such things or recolouring sources, except for removing white backgrounds. Thank you for reminding me of this!

Fourthly, as for the story, there has been previous experts pointing out the flow of the story being too quick. I understand the need of changing the dialogues so that everything will be slower and easier to understand, and I'll get back to that during my renovation of the project. Thank you!

Oh yes, the audio problem. Thank you for recommanding audio cleanising, although it's the first time I've seen it . Pardon for my lack of experience. I do use most of the audios inside, but some of them I downloaded them in advance so as to save trouble from searching and downloading them in future.

Once again, thanks for your comment! I appreciate your valuable critiques and will be seeking to improve my game further...Well I think only to be seen after I published my revamped, expanded demo It is a big project, and I am looking for helplines to see flaws that I can't see Maybe after that, yeap.

Oh yes, as for the title screen, it's all credited to Shocky.

Thanks!

[AphidRuin]

Hello Guys,there is a new update!

I have decided to stop my progress for the moment to concentrate on the rebuilding of the demo.When I looked back at my dialogues, while, I laughed XD. They were indeed too fast even for me to catch the main idea, hence I extended the dialogues and explained more in detail so that everyone can get a good understanding of the storyline.

Also, I've created the characters' facesets! I am using them inside dialogues, along with Ccoa's UMS. From what I did so far, it had been quite a wonderful job, although tedious because I've to type 3 times longer than the original dialogues, add in codes, as well as remapping some places. Basically, a full-based reform of Shawn's Story!

To think how long I'll release the new demo...well, it depends, because I am doing solo-work right now!

[amerk]

Re-opened at the OP's request for updates.

[AphidRuin]

Garh, thanks for the effort!

I need to reupload the demo for a while. It would take quite a while for me to reorganise everything again!

Thank you for waiting, people. Expect a new demo soon!

[Edit]

I've just uploaded the new demo, ready for trial run. Thanks for the wait!

This post has been edited by AphidRuin: Nov 17 2012, 07:35 AM