I figured the wrong topic for Fan Fiction in general, I was asking about the fight scene, which does happen to be pathetic. Think of it this way, though, what happens to houses in the "Modern" era when they get hit by spells? That's why there was a barrier to bounce it back... and I hate being this stupid.
I get the idea, so I'll go back to fix up the fight scene... if you could call it that now, anyway.
Does this site support fan fiction?
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One hit KOs such as the ones you are doing are best when the focus of the text is the drama surrounding the fight and not the fight itself, or rather when the difference in skill between both combatants is large.
In normal battles, where you want the battle to be important, however, you should make them long, make them last more than just one or a few attacks. By example:
Drama oriented example: Ryan ran from his assailant, but they both reached a dead end. Ryan looked back to see the attacker approaching him, he staggered back, putting his body against the wall as the inevitable approached. The attacker rose his weapon above Ryan, Ryan closed his eyes in desperation, the strike fell down and Ryan was knocked out instantly.
Such are good for representing weaker characters (Or an extremely strong one, if you look at it from the attacker's perspective). And focus on the emotional side of the "battle" instead of it's action side.
Battle oriented example: Ryan ran from his assailant, but they both reached a dead end. Ryan looked back to see the attacker approaching him, he staggered back, putting his body against the wall as the inevitable approached. The attacker rose his weapon above Ryan, as the weapon fell on Ryan's direction, he pointlessly tried to stop it with his hands. The weapon hit his fingers and he let out a short yelp in pain. He then tried to fight back, tackling his attacker and knocking him to the ground. The attacker quickly swept his weapon sideways, hitting the side of Ryan's head. Ryan rolled away, clenching his head. Seeing Ryan was still conscious, the attacker walked up to him and hit him several more times, until Ryan eventually fell unconscious.
This last one, in the other hand, has "Ryan" trying to fight back, it severely reduces the fearful mood of the first one into one that is more connected with adrenaline and panic, instead of just fear. It also makes the victim, Ryan, look like he actually has the ability to defend himself.
I may have complicated this a bit more than necessary, so if you just skipped through this and decided to read from this last paragraph, i'm trying to say is, summarizing, that the smaller the difference of strength between two battling sides, the longer must be the battle, even if the battle involves quick weapons like guns or bombs. Both sides will keep attacking each other and not landing any full hits, until eventually one of the sides is too tired to fight properly and loses. Short, one hit KO battles are best for when the battle is between two sides whose power are greatly different, or for when you want to focus on the emotional side of the battle.
Mind you, this was all took out of my self-taught way of writing and may not be completely correct, anyone else is free to add or remove from it as they see fit.
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Sniped, lol. And yes, this site does support fan-fiction, just not here, that would be most appropriate in the "Artwork, Music and Lit Network" forum.
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I did, lol. It's in the "Edit:" part of my last post. >_>
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Ah, also just reminded myself of something. Making a battle long does not necessarily mean it's emotionally weak, just that it'll end up focusing more on the action rather than in the emotion.
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I figured the wrong topic for Fan Fiction in general, I was asking about the fight scene, which does happen to be pathetic. Think of it this way, though, what happens to houses in the "Modern" era when they get hit by spells? That's why there was a barrier to bounce it back... and I hate being this stupid.
Well if that was your line of reasoning, you have to mention it. Your audience doesn't know that. And you can't just write your characters to be dumb enough to get caught by a common security measure. It would be better if you described how Char maneuvered the situation so that Voldemort had his spell reflected back at him rather than just have it happen.
Personally I use fanfiction.net for most of my stories. I have one in the magazine but that's sort of a special case. As for writing and publishing on RRR, you may do so in the Art, Lit, and Music section of the board.
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Should I get my friend in on this for the time being? I mean, it's only because of the fact that I'm not sure when he's able to get on, so, please, let me know when he can get on.
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Soon the group is gonna go to a certain town, anyone else who wants to hop in the RP will be able to join in that town.
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